how does poverty crime and mass incarceration affected by educational system A+ Writers |

My thesis needs to be specified further – narrowed down. The rest of many paragraphs have too many varying ideas in different paragraphs – needs work on structure an organization of ideas. You can do this through clear topic sentences that work as supporting reasons for THESIS, not something else. DO NOT start topic sentences with evidence, data, statistics – use your own ideas that support your thesis. THEN show us evidence. The essay has to be minimum of 8 pages.